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Saturday, 28 October 2017

Smoky Mission

In that moment, when flames licked the horizon and the sky burned with an orange glow, Taylor knew everything was going to be alright.
 
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After all, his mission to destroy the enemy’s ammo was completed after days of struggle and this smog will be his cover for escape.

Taylor was hurrying towards to his camp to ensure his wounds were treated timely as they were making his body’s immunity system weak.  

Just as he saw a camp lights at 50 meter distance a hand on his shoulder left him alarmed.

 He turned swiftly to defend and then collapsed.

#Word Count - 98


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16 comments:

  1. Iain Kelly28 October 2017 at 17:03

    So close, but didn't get away with it. Good action scene.

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:03

      Thanks Iain, tried action scene for first time. I am happy it turned out well.

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  2. Michael29 October 2017 at 06:29

    That's a good response to the prompt, well done.

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:05

      Thanks Michael. Enjoyed writing for First Line Friday.

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  3. Dipika29 October 2017 at 18:36

    I wish to know more - what happens next? Was it the enemy or someone to save him...
    So hooked to the beautiful narration

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:06

      Thanks Dipika, kept the story crisp to build the suspense.

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  4. Geethica29 October 2017 at 21:12

    Oh...this was spine chilling till the end. You very written very aptly in such less words.

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  5. Linda30 October 2017 at 19:23

    Good tension, well built to the climax. Good take on the prompt.

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:08

      Thanks Linda, tried the action for first time and happy blogging community is liking it :)

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  6. James1 November 2017 at 02:55

    I built an "almost made it" moment into my response to the prompt as well. I didn't see the sunrise (as I chose to interpret it) as all that hopeful. Sorry your character didn't make it either.

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:10

      James, looks like you like happy ending. Story is open ended the character Taylor still could have made it to the camps.

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  7. payal agarwal1 November 2017 at 22:05

    Beautifully written. Nice opening lines.

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    1. MeenalSonal3 November 2017 at 12:11

      Thanks Payal, the opening lines were First Line friday prompt.

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  8. Shilpa Garg2 November 2017 at 13:02

    Oh that was an unexpected twist.

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